Riptide P. Menhir - Bio Critique Needed!
Feb 17, 2015 12:38:20 GMT -8
Post by Shadow on Feb 17, 2015 12:38:20 GMT -8
Hey all. :3 I'm trying to adopt my first Koltherian via the DTA round. I was hoping to get some imput on my Human and Anthro designs so far. (Granted, Neither are colored yet)
Also, is there anything important I would have to know about wing design? any tips or tricks?
~Shadow
*EDIT* Posted "Final" draft of reference sheet, and in the process of writing his personality... I still need a name... but have been waffling between, Pike, Trench, and Canon. I envision him being the gentleman type who isn't offended easily even if others used to make fun of his spine placement.
Name: Riptide P. Menhir
Nicknames: Pike, RT, Tide, ‘Captain Pike’
Gender: Male
Age: 1730 (Adult)
Feral Height: 9’7” at shoulder
Human Height: 13’11”
Half-Form Height: 15’8”
Wingspan: 48’
Body Type: Long
Mutations: Spines (common and unusually placed), Base color (rare)
Base Color: (#b4f87f) Lime green
Marking Colors: (#58e7a1) Turquoise, (#266163) Dark Teal
Blood Color: Unsaturated turquoise color like the inside of his ears and mouth
Scent: Mixture of lavender and mint.
S.O: Straight
Mate: None (atm, but crushing a little ;3)
Education: Completed
Occupation: Marine biologist, socialite, and amateur diver
Residence: Whitskar for the ocean
Friends: Flux (likes her daring and flirty attitude, and finds her to be very humorous and enjoyable to be around)
Bio: He was raised in Tratool on a small farm, but took frequent visits to Whitskar to see the ocean. While in Tratool he developed a taste for home grown and fresh ingredients as well as a love for cooking. He was teased a little as a child for his facial anomaly, but learned how to keep his head held high no matter what the bullies said about him. His childhood was anything but tragic though, in fact, it was very fulfilling. Riptide learned to be respectful to others and to not hold grudges as a child. He was allowed to experiment with cooking, art, math, and tinker with spare parts to make his own “technology”. Whenever he could, he would find a pond or brook to poke around in, hoping to find some kind of unknown aquatic creature. Ever since he was a kid he loved the water and had a knack for science. After finishing school he started pursuing a career in environmental science while taking some cooking classes on the side. After moving to Whitskar for easy access to the coast, he became a marine biologist. Nowadays he can be found beneath the waves searching for a creature that rivals the size of the Titan Constrictor. He believes that a creature could have easily grown longer than 100ft deep in the depths of Aivos’ ocean trenches.
Personality: A true gentleman, Riptide is a soft spoken and level-headed Kolther who can enjoy himself with others or alone. Through his life he’s developed a unique sense of humor that can rouse laughter from the grouchiest listener. He can bond with others fairly easily, but finds the most middle ground with people concerning food. Sitting in a café or restaurant and sharing advice with another Kolther, whether they are a friend or a stranger is one of his favorite pastimes. He loves society and nature and feels at home walking through the city streets of Orita as well as the natural landscape of Vondale. He values kindness and likes to keep an open mind. He’s very approachable and would gladly share tips and tricks with another Kolther. An angry Riptide is rare to see; since he’s calm in just about any situation it takes a great deal to upset him. Missed opportunities are one thing that upsets him the most since he has a habit of starting things but leaving them unfinished. Despite this He’s able to motivate others to finish their work and strive to become better. He hates it when people are rude to each other, especially when they interrupt each other and begin fighting. Getting in the way of his cooking or meals will surely result in a frying pan to the face. A hungry Riptide is an angry Riptide.
Clothing: Riptide has always liked the allure of a well-fitting jacket and pants. He's often seen wearing black slacks, a tan sash, dark grey vest, black jacket, white scarf with tan stripes, and a leather strap necklace with his favorite shell fastened to it. When he’s not strolling around Aivos or in the water, he can be found at home or in the forest wearing comfortable sweat-wear. While in the water he likes to swim naked, but he makes sure to keep a pair of spare shorts nearby just in case skinny-dipping is prohibited.
Likes: The ocean, fishing, hiking, listening to music, eating out at restaurants with friends, exploring Aivos, tending to his miniature garden, inventing small eco-friendly contraptions that work in the water, a good laugh, lore of any kind, relaxing with a cup of coffee or hot chocolate, experimenting with cooking food and creating his own dishes (he “specializes” in soups and sea food.) He enjoys walks along the beach both for the scenery as well as the cosmetic value. The sunshine and ocean water keep his skin clear and smooth.
Dislikes: smoking, pollution, undercooked meats, messiness, disorganization, he will gamble every now and then, but can’t stand people who only gamble and spend money, uptight and judgmental Kolthers, Kolthers who drink too much, sure he likes a drink every now and then, but talking to someone whose breath wreaks of sour alcohol is off-putting to him. Mindless destruction whether it be, physical, emotional, or tangible is one of his greatest “dislikes,” for a man who likes to create and mend things, seeing things destroyed tears him up inside. He has little tolerance for people who lie in order to make themselves look good or to better their lot in life; you get to where you are based on merit, or not at all. Finding that someone used the restroom and didn’t flush the toilet… While he's willing to get messy with at work, he's a little obsessed when it comes to cleanliness as well as grammar.
Future Aspirations: Ever since he was a boy, Riptide has dreamed about discovering new or extinct species of creatures across the globe. He’s confident that extinct fossilized remains of creatures exist in the sediment of the earth, and that numerous living fossils could be found in watery depths of Aivos’s uncharted waters. Fish, reptiles or amphibians thought to be extinct for several millennia are what he seeks to find. Ideally, he’d like to team up with a skilled mechanic in order to build self-sustaining submersible crafts. Years of effort and exploration would culminate in a complete mapping of Aivos’ ocean and ocean floor, as well as a nautical encyclopedia of aquatic species. Occasionally he ponders the validity of opening am aquatic theme park… however; this is nothing more than a fantasy to him, and not something he would actively pursue. Locking rare sea creatures up in cages and tanks for public display is not appealing to him. However, he wouldn’t be against guided tours of the sea floor. When he becomes more experienced in the culinary arts, he’d like to open a small café or restaurant. Riptide aspires to become a father and have a kid. He would love to be able to show his future child the wonders of the world that he searched for on his own for so long.
Other Information: Riptide was granted his middle name during a fishing contest. He was the first to catch a large Pike out of the group and the name just stuck with him. Through the course of trial and error he’s slowly learned how to kiss girls. This might seem like a trivial fact, but the spines on his face, specifically his nose, don’t exactly make it easy for intimate, physical contact. The memories of his first attempts and failures still make him blush, as they were hilarious.
Also, is there anything important I would have to know about wing design? any tips or tricks?
~Shadow
*EDIT* Posted "Final" draft of reference sheet, and in the process of writing his personality... I still need a name... but have been waffling between, Pike, Trench, and Canon. I envision him being the gentleman type who isn't offended easily even if others used to make fun of his spine placement.
Name: Riptide P. Menhir
Nicknames: Pike, RT, Tide, ‘Captain Pike’
Gender: Male
Age: 1730 (Adult)
Feral Height: 9’7” at shoulder
Human Height: 13’11”
Half-Form Height: 15’8”
Wingspan: 48’
Body Type: Long
Mutations: Spines (common and unusually placed), Base color (rare)
Base Color: (#b4f87f) Lime green
Marking Colors: (#58e7a1) Turquoise, (#266163) Dark Teal
Blood Color: Unsaturated turquoise color like the inside of his ears and mouth
Scent: Mixture of lavender and mint.
S.O: Straight
Mate: None (atm, but crushing a little ;3)
Education: Completed
Occupation: Marine biologist, socialite, and amateur diver
Residence: Whitskar for the ocean
Friends: Flux (likes her daring and flirty attitude, and finds her to be very humorous and enjoyable to be around)
Bio: He was raised in Tratool on a small farm, but took frequent visits to Whitskar to see the ocean. While in Tratool he developed a taste for home grown and fresh ingredients as well as a love for cooking. He was teased a little as a child for his facial anomaly, but learned how to keep his head held high no matter what the bullies said about him. His childhood was anything but tragic though, in fact, it was very fulfilling. Riptide learned to be respectful to others and to not hold grudges as a child. He was allowed to experiment with cooking, art, math, and tinker with spare parts to make his own “technology”. Whenever he could, he would find a pond or brook to poke around in, hoping to find some kind of unknown aquatic creature. Ever since he was a kid he loved the water and had a knack for science. After finishing school he started pursuing a career in environmental science while taking some cooking classes on the side. After moving to Whitskar for easy access to the coast, he became a marine biologist. Nowadays he can be found beneath the waves searching for a creature that rivals the size of the Titan Constrictor. He believes that a creature could have easily grown longer than 100ft deep in the depths of Aivos’ ocean trenches.
Personality: A true gentleman, Riptide is a soft spoken and level-headed Kolther who can enjoy himself with others or alone. Through his life he’s developed a unique sense of humor that can rouse laughter from the grouchiest listener. He can bond with others fairly easily, but finds the most middle ground with people concerning food. Sitting in a café or restaurant and sharing advice with another Kolther, whether they are a friend or a stranger is one of his favorite pastimes. He loves society and nature and feels at home walking through the city streets of Orita as well as the natural landscape of Vondale. He values kindness and likes to keep an open mind. He’s very approachable and would gladly share tips and tricks with another Kolther. An angry Riptide is rare to see; since he’s calm in just about any situation it takes a great deal to upset him. Missed opportunities are one thing that upsets him the most since he has a habit of starting things but leaving them unfinished. Despite this He’s able to motivate others to finish their work and strive to become better. He hates it when people are rude to each other, especially when they interrupt each other and begin fighting. Getting in the way of his cooking or meals will surely result in a frying pan to the face. A hungry Riptide is an angry Riptide.
Clothing: Riptide has always liked the allure of a well-fitting jacket and pants. He's often seen wearing black slacks, a tan sash, dark grey vest, black jacket, white scarf with tan stripes, and a leather strap necklace with his favorite shell fastened to it. When he’s not strolling around Aivos or in the water, he can be found at home or in the forest wearing comfortable sweat-wear. While in the water he likes to swim naked, but he makes sure to keep a pair of spare shorts nearby just in case skinny-dipping is prohibited.
Likes: The ocean, fishing, hiking, listening to music, eating out at restaurants with friends, exploring Aivos, tending to his miniature garden, inventing small eco-friendly contraptions that work in the water, a good laugh, lore of any kind, relaxing with a cup of coffee or hot chocolate, experimenting with cooking food and creating his own dishes (he “specializes” in soups and sea food.) He enjoys walks along the beach both for the scenery as well as the cosmetic value. The sunshine and ocean water keep his skin clear and smooth.
Dislikes: smoking, pollution, undercooked meats, messiness, disorganization, he will gamble every now and then, but can’t stand people who only gamble and spend money, uptight and judgmental Kolthers, Kolthers who drink too much, sure he likes a drink every now and then, but talking to someone whose breath wreaks of sour alcohol is off-putting to him. Mindless destruction whether it be, physical, emotional, or tangible is one of his greatest “dislikes,” for a man who likes to create and mend things, seeing things destroyed tears him up inside. He has little tolerance for people who lie in order to make themselves look good or to better their lot in life; you get to where you are based on merit, or not at all. Finding that someone used the restroom and didn’t flush the toilet… While he's willing to get messy with at work, he's a little obsessed when it comes to cleanliness as well as grammar.
Future Aspirations: Ever since he was a boy, Riptide has dreamed about discovering new or extinct species of creatures across the globe. He’s confident that extinct fossilized remains of creatures exist in the sediment of the earth, and that numerous living fossils could be found in watery depths of Aivos’s uncharted waters. Fish, reptiles or amphibians thought to be extinct for several millennia are what he seeks to find. Ideally, he’d like to team up with a skilled mechanic in order to build self-sustaining submersible crafts. Years of effort and exploration would culminate in a complete mapping of Aivos’ ocean and ocean floor, as well as a nautical encyclopedia of aquatic species. Occasionally he ponders the validity of opening am aquatic theme park… however; this is nothing more than a fantasy to him, and not something he would actively pursue. Locking rare sea creatures up in cages and tanks for public display is not appealing to him. However, he wouldn’t be against guided tours of the sea floor. When he becomes more experienced in the culinary arts, he’d like to open a small café or restaurant. Riptide aspires to become a father and have a kid. He would love to be able to show his future child the wonders of the world that he searched for on his own for so long.
Other Information: Riptide was granted his middle name during a fishing contest. He was the first to catch a large Pike out of the group and the name just stuck with him. Through the course of trial and error he’s slowly learned how to kiss girls. This might seem like a trivial fact, but the spines on his face, specifically his nose, don’t exactly make it easy for intimate, physical contact. The memories of his first attempts and failures still make him blush, as they were hilarious.
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I added the reference sheet, (after shrinking it several times due to the board's file restrictions) any thoughts and not choice and such? 
